[Critique Group 1] Critiques for August 2022

[Marcia Wick]

Deanna,

Thanks for your comments. Are you sending your notes early because you won't
be on the August call?

Marcia

 

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Subject: [Critique Group 1] Critiques for August 2022

 

Marcia,

The only thing I could find to correct was: "the call was costing me six
dollars a minutes, there shouldn't be an S on minutes. 

I am not sure this chapter advances the story much, except to give a little
background color to why Veronica seems shallow. She learned to take care of
herself first from her mother. Good work.

 

Sally,

Repair n organ, needs an a before the letter n.

 

DeAnna Quietwater Noriega

Cell: 573-544-3511

Email: dqnoriega at gmail.com <mailto:dqnoriega at gmail.com> 

Author of Fifty Years of Walking with Friends

https://www.dldbooks.com/dqnoriega/

 

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