[Critique Group 1] My Critiques for February Group 1

[Bonnie Blose]

## Doghouse Productions presents: School Days, a skit written by Deanna I
thought this was cute. The communication between the animals was good. I
liked the creativity of thinking how dogs could view   their jobs. Like
people, they would consider some aspects of work benefits and others
liabilities. What I enjoyed especially was making the most of the
opportunity. 

That Song

Mary Jo

As I read this poem, I remembered songs just as irritating. We all have far
more than one. This was funny and fell in to the category of "why didn't I
think of that?" Sometimes the simplest ideas are truly the best. 

## Children of Dust

Cleora   

Because this story is known by most people, I feel the Scriptures are
distracting. I would suggest several sentences be changed slightly. It is an
interesting take on how easily the story of Adam and Eve could occur. This
is a good example of how temptation still exists in our world. Adam and Eve
want what is desirable and gives pleasure just as we do.

## Crossings

Marilyn

This is a very creative piece of writing. The dates are signposts of
importance and make this a terrific way to share history. It is very well
written. I wish students could learn history through pieces like this one.  

  

 

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