[Critique Group 2] Leonard's comments on Joan's July 23 sub

[leonard tuchyner]

Sometimes it is difficult to pierce the dream state

to wakefulness.

The dreamer does not want to wake up,

enjoying that state

which is neither awake or sleep.

The world barges in

with vales, walls and other  guides,

which serve to  direct consciousness.

These directors or mis-directors

leaves her gasping, guessing  and  grasping for a clue to what she remembers

as beautiful, essential, and real.

I think that applies to all of us.

We sometimes fight for the essentials of waking life

that make it worth living.

We think we have it, but it is so illusive.

We want to hold on  to that sublime feeling that it is just around the corner.



cloudy

by Joan Myles



is it morning yet

my own thought cloud too thickly



the inner light and joy

 the beam beyond the dream of living



the world closes in sometimes

veils to walls to masquerading guides



leave me guessing

leave me gasping



grasping for what I think I know and remember

all that is beautiful and important