[Critique Group 2] Brad's Critiques for Group-2-4-27-23.docx

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Critiques for Group-2-4-27-23 

 

1. Joan's piece: 

 

A piece that deplores the madness of our 21st century world. Beginning with
the insurrection, mass shootings which are just now part of our culture and
phony Nazi lunatics spouting patriotism. However, three things stand in the
face of all the negative forces. Goodness, Longing and a whispering voice
that feeds our fragile feelings of hope. These are things we must hold onto,
in order to even maintain the following: "sweet and sad and urgent leading
us to a place of deep dark peace." A starkly real poem about hanging onto
hope.

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2. Leonard's piece:

 

A poem where Leonard describes the struggle to fly in the face of family
culture, Faith and custom, by pursuing a potential marital relationship with
a woman of different cultural and spiritual beliefs. Though it is specific,
it seems to address powerful and yet antiquated social conventions that
inhibit and impede the desires of individual's. There are two choices: to
hold with convention or put it aside and go forward with what one believes
is right and true. Shades of Romeo and Juliette. In line two: "For it
seemed, in my enfeeble mind" would work better as: "to my enfeebled mind."

Leonard captures his sense of uncertainty quite effectively.

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3. Alice's piece: 

 

A tribute to well over 26 types of poems. Alice nicely covers specific
poetic forms, memories, family, celebrations nature and even "Under-rated
poems that should be published" to mention just a few. The sincere love of
virtually all types of poetry comes through very strongly. A very appealing
poem for National Poetry Month!

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4. Dawn's piece:

 

A vividly descriptive piece of creative nonfiction. It manages to cover: an
intriguing old house of a friend, close friendships, a nicely backfiring
prank, the sometime diverging paths that previously close friends take,
growing up Gay in NJ in the late 60s and 70s and the later Aids epidemic.
The author makes her presence strongly felt in this piece. It held this
reader's interest and ignited the desire to hear more of the story. Two
pages+ that seemingly effortlessly create an easy mind-movie to step into. 

  

 

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