[Critique Group 2] Leonard's comments on Val's sub

[Leonard Tuchyner]

As usual  thispoem  tells of falling, and slowly comingback. 

It expresses what it takes to come back.  

Need is freedom is one factor that I do not equate withhealing. 

What do you mean by need. 

Description of the breakdown is wonderfully described. 

Grace to me means that it is not an act of will, 

but is given by a higher power. 

Is this right. 

The coming back is like being awakened into a new morning.  “ 

I am here. 

I love, crumble ,

I stand again, 

says to me this is what you do every time you go through this kind of episode. 

These are the things that provide hope.

 

Breakdown

 

Breakdown

two weeks ago

or a lifetime.

 

Hard sound

fading light

plunge in to cracking

shattered spirit.

 

Survival

after cataclizmic 

undoing is grace.

 

Slowly

coming back

is a new dawn--

 

I am here

I love

I crumble

I stand again

 

Frailty is openness

need is freedom

realization is healing

hope is born of these.

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Leonard I. Tuchyner, Author
 
https://www.dldbooks.com/tuchyner/

 
  
 
 

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