[Critique Group 2] Leonard's comments on Joan's sub

[Leonard Tuchyner]

This poem is about haloween. 

The dreamer feels like there is  something watching, stalking her. 

She can’t see them, because she is blind. 

But she feels them taking control of her like a puppeton strings. 

They pull her into the air 

where she finds herself flying. 

This fear cannot be silenced by dawn. 

the fear, is echoed in her screams,

and it has been embossed on  the fringe of her soul in   bloody crimson. 

The wires  thatcontrol her are flameing.  

The poem is bery poetic. 

It catures the essence of fear. 

Well done.

 

Joan sub for oct 22

 

 

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Tue, Oct 18, 2022 11:04 am
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Midnight Ghosts

by Joan Myles





crawling eyes

of light unblind me

calling sighs

find me

 

flaming wires

walk me madly

gladly flyers

claiming me

 

silencesinged

pastdawn’s redeeming

crimsonfringed

dreaming)

 




 
 
Leonard I. Tuchyner, Author
 
https://www.dldbooks.com/tuchyner/

 
  
 
 

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