[Critique Group 2] Leonard's comments on Val's subb.

[Leonard Tuchyner]

This poem asks a series of questions. 

What choices will people make . 

Will they  choose toexperience the beauty and serenity of what the Earth has to give, 

Or will they suffer from the alternative ways of seeing 

which is also real. 

The title unholy glimpses tells me that the writer catches glimpses of the negative

.  They are holy inthat  the bad ones do not lift us up

. They tear us  down.  

The same things like silver cluds can be seen as carryingrain 

and tears, 

or they can be seen as the giver of flowers.  

Flowers that bloom after  a night of pollination can be interpreted as opportunitieslost, 

Such as belonging, 

and be the cause of sadness. 

They can hear the wind blowing 

and hear the quiet of the day, 

or can be overwhelmed  by  noise. 

The noise itself can be heard as quiet sounds of theneighborhood,  or a bluster of soundsdenoting one more boring day. 

One can contemplate the pictures made in clouds   to display the borinness of the day. 

 

Val sub for oct 22

 

 

Unholy Glimpses

 

Across the morning sky

light and color paint 

questions with no set answers.

 

How will the human folk be this day?

Will they acknowledge the beaming sun,

grumble at the silver rain

bathing the earth so thirsty for nurture?

Shall they give themselves a gift of quiet

or dance to the torrant of noise:

cel phones,

radio/Tv

laptop and AI intrusions?

 

In the drowned-out wind sound:

babies cry

dogs bark

cats survey their territory

as the sun climbs higher.

 

Flowers bloom after nights of volent exchange,

physical reminders of lost belonging--

children shiver from lack of 

  unfound security.

 

Earth shares her green and gold,

sky, her pudgy cloud-pictures

for those blessed enough to see them

amid the calamity of grand boredom.

 

Valerie Moreno

Our body is not made of iron, our strength not that ofstone. Live and

hope in the Lord and let your service be according toreason.

-Clare of Assisi

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spiritwind at pmpmail.com

 

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