[Critique Group 2] 10-27-22 Group-2 Critiques.docx

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10-27-22 Group-2 Critiques

 

 

Leonard's piece:

 

A piece that honors and extols nature instead of development and the
expansion of humanity into pristine natural spaces. The part about the leaf
blowers and lawn mowers truly resonates with me as this has been an ongoing
issue in my area since I moved here. As for many who move to our
country-like places, taming nature instead of appreciating it seems to be
their priority. I fear that if our species survives, the remaining natural,
green, undeveloped places will only be found in national parks.  

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Alice's piece:

 

A very nicely constructed piece in which a ghost is felt, smelled, heard and
finally seen. Most lines other than the last nine, begin with the word:
"once." Question: is this approach known as parallel structure? I really
like this piece a lot. The places where the ghost is encountered all fit
together well and add to the overall eeriness the poem creates. And is there
a deeper message, like occasionally one can get a presentiment of their own
mortality in certain places? 

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Joan's piece:

 

A piece in which ghosts and malevolent forces impinge upon the narrator.
Whether she is dreaming or she is their dream is not fully clear. The piece
does create a feeling that is uncomfortable. Again, this is another
fascinating poem by Joan where I can only make broad observations and am,
admittedly baffled by several lines. 

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Valerie's piece:

 

A piece that conveys to this writer a sense of world weariness. Natural
beauty is up against: "cell phones,

radio/Tv

laptop and AI intrusions?" As a result, many are lost to Earthly beauty. The
prevailing or current default state of humanity is: "the calamity of grand
boredom." 

 Perhaps the only chance for hope in this piece lies in: "

Earth shares her green and gold,

sky, her pudgy cloud-pictures

for those blessed enough to see them." It seems that to many, such are no
longer visible.  There is only noise and boredom.

 

 

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