[Critique Group 2] Fwd: Leonard's comments on Joan's piece

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Subject: Leonard's comments on Joan's piece


Joan sub for May 22 revised
 
  
 
  
 
This is a song. 
 
It is beautiful to hear.
 
It doesn’t have to make sense in a logical way.
 
Yet, I try to break it down.
 
 
 
Soulsong
 
by Joan Myles
 
  
 
sing for me please the colors of your soul
 
and I will sing you mine
 
  
 
Sing (tell) me the colors 
 
(qualities) of your soul 
 
and I will tell you mine. 
 
Let us communicate, in the way that souls  communicate. 
 
It is more a dance than anything else. 
 
But soul communication defies the limitations of normal communication..
 
 
 
flashing and fragmented flimsy or whole
 
sing to me shadow sing shine
 
  
 
It doesn’t matter about what parts of your soul  are involved.  
 
The soul  consists of all  human or non-human endeavor.
 
It is shadowed, gragmented, etc. 
 
Just show me what you show me.
 
 
 
sing to me fling to me florah and foal
 
Fashion each valley and hill
 
paint for me please the song of your soul
 
  
 
Soul is unlimited. 
 
It is all around. Up and down.
 
  
 
as ever for you I will
 
It is not possible for us not to do this. 
 
I  do thisfor  you as you do it for me.

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