[Critique Group 2] Emailing: Group-2 Critiques for 5-26-22

[James]

Group-2 Critiques for 5-26-22 

1. Joan's piece:

This piece: "Soulsong" has true song-like rhythm and flow. It is a piece
that conveys joyfulness in the sharing of individual soul qualities. It
reminds me of the delight filled, seemingly improvised verses of the
character Tom Bombadil from J.R.R. Tolkien's legendarium. 

2. Leonard's piece:

Another piece where joy is achieved in this case through shared music
making. Leonard creates a picture of precious musical moments in his
relationship with Diane. He also makes the important point that music can
dramatically improve mood especially if one recognizes that is what they
need in the moment. I have often said that I couldn't live in this world
without music. And such is abundantly true! 

3. Valerie's piece:

An unusually long piece from Valerie. I surmise that she is referring to the
family home that she grew up in (in spite of everything: "House of pain and
weeping, can't pull me down, just apart.") Her relationship with the house
went through a number of stages ultimately ending in what sounds like,
uncomfortable acceptance. Also there was some hard won learning that seems
to have taken place. In line (1) it seems that an "o" was accidentally
omitted. 

4. Alice's piece:

A thoughtful and cleverly written piece about retirement for which I thank
you. Well, you are certainly right when you say: "I must confess
that, to me, retirement 
is a process:
retirement does not really happen
on one day, at one hour, or in one minute.
All that led to this career.must be unwound." The change in the mental
measuring of time is also a very real thing. The use of rhyme lends itself
well to the multiple observations made in the poem. I am going to hazard a
guess that there were also things that Alice didn't miss after retirement
though they are not covered here. So I will include some of mine: the
ongoing threats to our program funding, non-state-of -the-art computers with
programs that worked poorly with adaptive technology, getting up at 5:15a.m.
to commute on "accessible transit buses" that ran on inconsistent schedules,
an old makeshift facility which offered multiple poor working conditions,
years until the last two, having a C.E.O who was an extremely over paid
insecure and nasty mean spirited individual that most real working staff
detested and a shame-based corporate culture that functioned like, what we
described as:  "farming in India"---that is: we have been doing the same
thing for 10,000 years and we will continue to do things the same way for
the next 10,000 years. I will miss my clients and a number of my co-workers
as Alice alluded to in her enjoyable retirement poem.   
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