[Critique Group 2] Leonard's comments on Vals's sub

[Leonard Tuchyner]

As ;usual , this is beautiful. 

I especially like the phrase , where it sayssomething like, 

‘time waits with time left for daydreams 

I can feel the taste of a tangelo with juicesluicing down my mout and gullet. 

I used to have a tangelo tree.  

I love the use of gentle and true to describe the  kitchen experience

. There is nothing negative about this poem, 

except it has been    perhaps a worrisome day.

This proves you can write  exceptional poetry in the positive.

 

 

Val sub for August 22

 

Summer Fruit

 

 

 

One sweet taste

brings cool escape

to a worry-soaked day.

 

 

 

The smooth, tart texture

reminds me of simple

summer days when

time waited and there

was enough left for daydreams.

 

 

 

Now, taste and memory

mingle in my

tiny kitchen,

softly creating new pleasure

gentle, true.

 

Valerie Moreno

 

*disregard "Clare" poem--this is group2 sub for 8-25-22

________

spiritwind at pmpmail.com

Hold fast to your dreams, for if dreams die,life is a broken-winged bird

that cannot fly.

-Langston Hughes

_______________________________________________
Group2 mailing list
Group2 at bluegrasspals.com
https://blueg




 
 
Leonard I. Tuchyner, Author
 
https://www.dldbooks.com/tuchyner/

 
  
 
 

-------------- next part --------------
An HTML attachment was scrubbed...
URL: <https://bluegrasspals.com/pipermail/group2/attachments/20220830/e9107892/attachment-0001.htm>