[Critique Group 2] Leonards comments on Joan

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Joan sub for oct




 



 


Into Stillness at Glen Eden Beach



by Joan Myles




 


With rushing, writhing roar, the lunar pull



connecting Heaven, Earth and raptured sigh



the scene is a beach 



with the moon  shining down on the ocean 



seeming to connect Earth and Heven.




 


compels my restless spirit up to full-



winged freedom, up and out and ever nigh—



This compels her spirit to be free, 



rising  ever higher, 



ever deeper. 



It rises above the mind



,, beyond the will. 



Beyond the things there are todespair about. 





 



 



 


deep and deeper still--beyond the mind,



beyond the will, the self and all despair--



sea-foam becoming mist becoming air,




 


The ocean mist   in its rising spirit  is purified into air. 



This is a natural cycle 



that she  experiences in its fllness of life. 



It is the essence of life.  



Mist to air. 



Life devine.




 


the breath of life, and Life Divinely there.




 


Meanwhile, Van Duzer, dreamy-dark as night,



lures wayward children seeking luscious green



idyllic pathways toward a wretched plight




 


I tried to get Van Deuser to playon  my smart speaker. 



But you have to join something onAmazon to get it.  



But I think you are  saing  that 



children who don’t know  any better 



seek heaven in  lifes illusions.



 That is a  wretched  seeking. 



Stillness can’t be found that way.




 


amid illusions Life is what is seen. 




 


For stillness is a moment not a place.



each touch, each word, each holy wave I trace.




 


Stilness is a   momentary  thing. 



Attained by a touch, 



a word  oranything unplanned. 



It is spontaneous.



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