[Critique Group 2] Leonards comments on brad's sub

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This is an astounding description of waking upand getting through the  day. 




 


Brad sub for October 21




 



 


Unheralded Friday morning battle.




 



 


The vbattle is rarely talked about.  But you’vedescribed it eloquently.




 


C by Brad Corallo



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Swimming up from anesthetized depths,



torpor like a robe of concrete




 


Beautiful description. 




 



 


dragging me back down.




 


Somehow try to fight against



the energy sapping bonds.



Knowing with every fiber



that it is too soon!



Would so like to let go



and Sink back gloriously




 


Yes, it would be nice to sleep just a little bitlonger. To slip back into sleep.



.



But must perform-



after all it is show business and-



the show must go on!




 


One must get on with life.  It’s a show. All of  life is a stage, etc.




 



 


In such moments,



Caffeine is my only friend!




 


 Drink up.Let it impart its wakefulness, or the next best thing.




 



 


Gradually I pull myself up



with broken nails and blistered fingertips.




 


Broken nails and fingertips. What a dramaticpicture. Cudos.




 



 


Pain remains like an over wound fishing reel.



seated deeply in muscles



surrounding the Atlas vertebrae.




 


How did you ever come up with that.  



It describes the lingering  brain fog of still not quite being awake. 




 


Cudos




 


Slowly, depending upon excessive institutionalcoffee



I approach something like



semi-functional awareness.




 


Only semi functional. 



You hope tghat with accomplishment 



will come real wakefulness. 



You are there. 



Maybe the activities themselves will add to yurpresence.




 



 



 



 



 


I don't feel adequate to the day's demands.



And yet, I am there



making a supreme effort



to focus and do



the necessary deeds at hand.



Hoping the magic of accomplishment



will ultimately, fully energize



and animate my weary strivings.



jamesstarfire at gmail.com 



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