[Critique Group 2] Joan's comments for April 29

[Joan Myles]

Dear Friends,

What could be better than spending time in such a meaningful discussion!
Poetry, creativity, Life and longing...I think we explored all of these and
more. Thanks for all you are.
Joan
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Joan’s comments for April 2021

Leonard: Garden Melee

Great title.

The piece demonstrates the author’s rich experience and understanding of
plant behavior.

Informative and entertaining.

the writing drew me in and kept me reading.

Learning about plant behavior in this context is fascinating!

I watched the rug’s demise...confusing lingo to me.

Rhizome is a great Scrabble word, thanks!

Alice: Silver Dreams from a Gazebo

Beautiful title. I think of the gazebo bathed in moonlight.

gob pil...picturesque and meaningful

pink gazebo...I can see it

leaves fall like memories..wonderful switch

Looking back in time across the four directions is wonderful point of view.

This place is your center.

The lamb is a sweet ending--innocence and childhood still visit the place.

Val: Womanchild

portrait of personality with universal apllication

misintuition...interesting wording

self-centered as brilliance of sun...wonderful word choice; the sun burns
without concern

Brad: The Source

This feels like a quest inward.

Love the first stanza, draws me in

the language is exquisite

the spring suggests Spirit to me; it is the source

the azure stones echo of Biblical images of God with the stones beneath his
feet

Second stanza is great twist of focus

belief is as crucial as action...oh yes! Action is embodiment of belief
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