[Critique Group 2] Emailing: Critiques for Group 2 session 8-27-20

[Joan Myles]

Thanks so much Brad. Hope you will be with us next time!
Warmest regards,
Joan

On Sat, Aug 29, 2020 at 1:35 PM James <jamesstarfire at gmail.com> wrote:

>
> Critiques for Group 2 session 8-27-20
>
> Hey There Friends of Group 2,
> I listened to the recording of the session and found the feedback on my
> piece to be interesting and for the most part on target. Admittedly it
> wasn't "a warm fuzzy" and it painted a rather dark picture. However I
> sincerely believe that the human species has not done its best and needs to
> pick up its game very soon or the consequences will not be good to say the
> least. And now, to my belated critiques.
> ***
>
> 1. Valerie's piece:
>
> As always a strong sincere piece. There are a few things which you may or
> may not all ready be aware of:"
> Inuendo" change to innuendo. "perserverence" change to perseverance. Also
> consider changing prayer to pray as it may work better with the tense at
> that point. With a bit of polishing, this can become an even better good
> piece.
>
> 2. Leonard's piece:
>
> Ah, I have had many conversations about blindness and Zoom. Your use of
> irony is most effective. I have done tele-care therapy over the telephone
> on
> both sides i.e. therapist and client. I find the phone perfectly adequate.
> But if seeing my mug will make someone's day, I don't mind obliging. But if
> such makes their day, maybe they should get a life LOL!
>
> Alice's piece:
>
> I was a bit surprised by the ending but liked it. The piece maintained
> strong interest from line to line. However, a question: other than the
> obvious, what is the meaning of "Overmorrow?" Is it a place from somewhere
> or an invention of the author?
>
> Joan's piece:
>
> Again, Joan challenges our interpretive skills. My take is that the lines:
> "Close the eye and open
> The
> Heart."
> sum up the broad meaning of this poem. We live in a visual society where
> what is seen is judged. Perhaps allowing what we see to go to the heart
> before judging is what is truly needed, especially in these complex
> times.
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