[Critique Group 2] poem for August 27 critique session

[Alice Massa]

Dear Group 2 writer friends,


     Next week, please let me know if you were surprised by the ending 
of this thirty-line poem.


     I believe that I have not yet received Leonard's and Valerie's 
submissions for the 27th.


Stay well and wonderful!

Alice and Willow


*Liferhyme*

poem by Alice Jane-Marie Massa

I held onto the driftwood of dreams

as long as I could.

Now, I am swimming, swimming

in the Sea of Memories--

stroke, by stroke--

like the pendulum of time--

lifetime,

liferhyme.

How pleasant are these soothing waters of yesteryear!

How fun are the waves of the past!

Stroke, stroke,

float, float, a while,

a mile, or more.

Oh, Sea of Memories--

how you do please my Hoosier heart!

Yet, I know I must find landfall.

I suppose I must find the Land of Overmorrow.

Float, float, stroke, stroke.

Is that land ahead

or a misty mirage?

Does a mirage or miracle lie before me?

Alas, I can read a sign upon the land:

“Warning! COVID 19.

Take detour.”

Backstroke, backstroke,

over,

butterfly stroke, butterfly stroke--

back to the Sea of Memories,

back to the Liferhyme

over which I have

creative control.

* * *

Number of lines:30

Number of words 147

For Group 2, August 20, 2020, Thursday

Critique session:August 27, 2020


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