[Critique Group 2] Leonard's coments re: Val

[tuchyner5 at aol.com]

This pooem is devastatingly beautiful.  



It comes directly from the writer’s heart.  



It speaks of undying love that unites a coupleeternally. 



Time has not diminished the love  . 



The hurt of not having her husband with her  does not diminish, 



though the tears come less. 



Actually, anything I can say about this piece,other than that I love it, seems futile, because there is no way an explanationof the piece can explain the work better  than the work explainsetself.  



It would have been better if I just stoodsilently. 



But I’m supposed to critique  it.




 



 


Nine




 


Is it nine years 



since you'regone?



One short of ten,



another silentmilestone.



The writer marks each anniversary  of her husband’s passsing.   



I would like to know more about how the writer thinksabout the milestone.  



Is it just a mark of the time passing, 



or is it a mark of how much closer the  reunion will be?




 


Tears come lessoften,



hurt just asmuch--



Deep Autumnleaves turn brown



as they scatteraround my feet



like memories.



I absolutely love this stanza.  



The deep memories are brown with age. 



They scatter in disaray . 



They are mingled and aren’t easilly sorted out.  



They have lost clarity.   



They represent what was is no more . 



Except as memories, they are dead and decaying.




 


So much haschanged--



how could it not!



I have changed,too,



I pray for thebetter.



The writer has moved on. 



She really had no choice.  



The world around her has changed, as has she. 




 


Nine years, oneshort of ten--



my love remainsbright under a



mysterious moon.



 It is hardto believe how long it has been  but shestill counts the years since his death. 



One thing that has not died is her love,illuminated under a mysterious moon. 



The love cannot be described.




 


You would know mewell,



even withchanges.



I will know youin



the radiance oflife uninhibited..



There  is nodoubt that in a life after death  the twowill recognize each other, because no matter what the changes, 



their essences are the same. 



The love is eternal and goes way beyond thesuperficial.




 


Valerie Moreno




 


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Love God. ServeGod. Everything is in that.



-St. Clare of Assisi, 1194-1253




 


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