[Critique Group 2] **Mised you all!

[Joan Myles]

Darling Friends

I was so looking forward to our poetry chat on Thursday, and truly regret
missing it! i planned to join you right after a somewhat quick bite of
chicken fried rice which Jeff was going to retrieve along with a couple of
groceries. It had been blustery and rainy all day, so the thought of
Chinese food followed by a poetry discussion with dear friends sounded to
perfect to me.

Then Jeff called. He said he had the food, but his keys were locked in the
car. So he would be walking home,and would see me in about 30 minutes. I
hung up the phone, and listened to the wind and rain outside, and phoned my
daughter. She said she was out shopping with a friend, and would try to
intercept him. But she thought he would be home before  she would reach
him.

So I listened to the wind and the rain, and thought of Jeff walking home in
only a sweatshirt...I didn't know how far, or whether he was lugging
groceries as well. He arrived at 4:20, not as drenched as I had imagined.
But I wasn't sure how things had gone, so I figured I should check things
out. All was well *Praise GD*( but I missed being with you all. Thanks for
your patience and understanding!

Wishing you sweetness and light for a lovely Christmas season, and
delightful Hanukkah!
Joan
***Comments for December submissions***
!. Val One Blank Page

It's always hard to approach the page when the muse is hiding. Your use of
words like blank, invisible, numb, and frost bring the season of winter
face to face with the season of the mind, adding a sense of urgency to
kindle some kind of poetic fire. Thank you for this!

2. Alice Eavesdropping on Christmas

A lovely episode of your Indiana memoirs. I could picture the store and its
contents, with little Alice eager to observe every magical happening on
this spevcial night.The description of dark wooden floor, dark wooden
counters set the mood and provide a sharp contrast with the drop light
which habgs  like an angelic presence as I wait with you. But I wanted
more...this was just setting the stage. Thanks for sharing!

3. Leonard Ode to Flaws

An unexpected theme as most of us foolishly seek order and balance. . But
you lead the way with words like flawless and flat, talk about the
impeccable universe,  and pristine circles. Yes, the human path is twisted
and rocky at times, but the scenery is far more interesting, and with love
and learning as possible waysides, the straight and narrow looks all too
empty, indeed. Thank you for this!

4. Brad Panic Attack
A gripping statement of what we've all experienced from time to time. I
could feel the panic coming on with your use of dirty rising tide. And I
love the images of the caged animal with the howling wilderness...fabulous!
And the use of postcard
 vs poem, one implying relationship and the other solitude is masterful!
Thanks!
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