[Critique Group 2] Emailing: Pergamum Flashback-for 7/25/17 critique session.

[James]

Pergamum Flashback
C By Brad Corallo
Word count 198
In the ancient city's street I paced;
dusty feet in  well warn sandals.
Approaching the bizarre; senses assaulted by scents and sounds.
Incense, voices in many tongues, spiced meat frying in hot oil, barkers
hawking wares, cremation smoke.
Dung drying in the sun, the call of the Muezzin summoning the faithful to
prayer,
 punctuated by the solemn tones of a stately gong.
Four bearers in Arab dress
carry a fringed, bedizened palanquin. 
Silk curtains sway in the gentle breeze.
Between beats of his gong the herald proclaims: 
 "make way!, step back!, your shadows may not pollute  the dirt
over which the Princess Alazarra is born."
As I stood, entranced,
the silk parted.
her eyes met mine conveying the message
as if in my native tongue.
"We will meet one day in the next life, do not forget !"
I made an unobtrusive bow
with down cast eyes.
When I looked up,
she was gone. 
In a moment of silence, everything seemed to halt.
Just as quickly the world came back into motion.
I made my way forward into the bizarre
with a lightness of heart
and a song of praise upon my lips.



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