[Critique Group 1] Leonard's comments on Sally's sub

[Leonard Tuchyner]

Sally sub for Oct 22

A beautiful poem of a dream of  deceased husband 


 

in this season of the year.  

A beautiful reminiscence of him and thecommunity 

as they prefare for Christmas. 

The poem is as usuall wonderfullycrafted. 

The dream fades as the sleep ends. 

But it is not sad. 

She looks forward to seeing him many moretimes in the land of dreams. 

It is also telling of the communitysupport system 

as it was , and I suspect , 

still is, 

though different people are involved.  

So many lovely lines. 

I’ve noted a few.

 

Random nights, through the alchemy of dreaming,

I wander familiar never-trodden paths 

of seasonal markets while holding my husband’sarm.

Once more alive, he chooses a plump pumpkin

to become the jack o’ lantern we had not carvedin life.

Glistening cranberries, ripe for wintermuffins,

join loaves of rustic bread in our basket.

Join loafs of rustic breads in our basket

Bright holly berries adorn a pine wreath

we will hang on our country cottage’s door

to welcome village neighbors’ Yule calls.

In the darkness of the present, he fades 

to return another time in dreams of harvest andcommunity.  

                                                                       by Sally Rosenthal

 

 

 

                                                         

Random nights, through the alchemy of dreaming,

I wander familiar never-trodden paths 

of seasonal markets while holding my husband’sarm.

Once more alive, he chooses a plump pumpkin

to become the jack o’ lantern we had not carvedin life.

Glistening cranberries, ripe for wintermuffins,

join loaves of rustic bread in our basket.

Bright holly berries adorn a pine wreath

we will hang on our country cottage’s door

to welcome village neighbors’ Yule calls.

In the darkness of the present, he fades 

to return another time in dreams of harvest andcommunity.  

                                                                       by Sally Rosenthal

 

 

 




 
 
Leonard I. Tuchyner, Author
 
https://www.dldbooks.com/tuchyner/

 
  
 
 

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