[Critique Group 1] Leonard's comments on Sally's sub

[tuchyner5 at aim.com]

Very nice.  



I dig your Autumn garden, 



but I like the Spring and Summer ones aswell. 



Maybe Summer is a little too gaudy andhot.  



Certainly Autumn gardens are better formeditation. 



Your lines are full of alliteration  



and every word is important 



and a feast of sound and color



. Wonderful



. The thought is deep 



and carries the truth of the poem. 



It doesn’t get any better than this.




 



 



 



 


  MEDITATION




 


                   By Sally Rosenthal



             



Not for me the heady profusion



of a garden in Spring or Summer



with the promising yellow of shy primoses,dancing daffodils and burgeoning forsythia.



wild violets, blue lilacs and deep pink peonies



give way to glossy green and white mountainlaurel and lush red rhododendron



before roses burst forth in hues of reds,apricot and creamy white,



filling the sultry air with perfume that mixes



with the cloying sweetness of honeysuckle andjasmine.



Amid such richness, I am overwhelmed and growsleepy,



drugged into lassitude by nature’s display.



Give me the late-Autumn garden I frequent eachmorning



in my mind before the pale sun has fully risen.



I welcome the cracling frost beneath myshoes  



and the sharpness of wind through barebranches. 



A few saffron petals lie abandoned, and thenodding head of a blowsy mum



is what remains of short-lived splendor while



woody wisteria vines await renewal inPersephone’s hands.



Content amid witch hazel’s orange flowers,holly’s bright red berries 



and sturdy pines , I feel a kinship with thisessential garden. 



My invigorated soul sits with the starkserenity of  nature’s winnowing.



 



 




 



 



 


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