[Critique Group 1] Leonard's comments on DeAnna's sub

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She guided them from  the frensy of Childhood days. 



Into the peaceful rest of  nightfall. 



I love that phrase. 



Like fragrant jasmond  on soft summer nights. 



Beautiful. 



I loved the imagery and descriptive words.



The words are carefully chosen 



and all fit together nicely. 



Lots of alliteration. 



One of your best.




 



 



 


 My Mother




 



 


ByDeAnna Quietwater Noriega



 




 



 


They named her Twilight Woman



Slender and graceful



She moved softly when she walked.



Her voice was low and tender,



gentle and sweet when she sang.



She dressed in deep purple.



She guided them from the frenzy of childhooddays



Into the peaceful rest of nightfall.



Like fragrant Jasmin on soft summer nights



She brought comfort soothing their hurts.



filled their hearts with her love.



she made their world seem safe.



She was above all,



The mother of her five children.



 



 



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