[Critique Group 1] Leonard's comments on sally's sub for June

[tuchyner5 at aol.com]

I'm not sure I sent this.


D-DayVigil 

 

 

This piece captures a moment in history. 

It is a story of her Grandmother anxiouslytrying to maintain the mundane  chores oflife,

 while her future husband is fighting for hercountry and life.  

As usual it captures the mood of the moment.  

You have a talent for that. Very nice. 

 

 

Ontenterhooks in her parents’ home

I’m not familiar with  the term tenter hooks. What does it mean?

Inthe war-ravaged English Midlands, 

shesat and watched as the sky darkened 

withfog and clusters of aircraft,

greatbirds of prey now bent on

anunknown mission of salvation,

Formeda relentless migration toward the coast.

 It is a little confusing here what coastand what plaines. But I take it is the invasion of Normandy because of the title.  Her boy friendis involved , so I take it he has taken off for Europpe.  

Withrestless energy, she stirred a pot of lentil soup,

Switchedon the wireless, and put the kettle on the hob.

Sensingher American paratrooper beau 

wasinvolved in this frenzy, the young woman 

whowould become my mother prayed silently

amidstdroning planes and simmering soup.

 

                                               -Sally Rosenthal- 

 

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