[Critique Group 1] Leonard's comments on Sally's sub. for Dec.

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sub. for Dec.


As in allyour poems, 
 
you capturethe essence of an experience. 
 
In thiscase it is complicated. 
 
Memory isconflictual.  
 
Memorieshave the quality of loss and grief. 
 
However, theyare blured and run into each other 
 
so that theclear quality is blunted, 
 
and you getmore of the essence of the experiences 
 
that youare remembering.  
 
Theperfection of those experiences are illusory anyway.  
 
So, thetrue essence that you are left with  isactually the reality of those experiences. 
 
The simpleremaining quality of those memories are broken down to a cup and the purring ofa cat to keep you company. 
 
The tinseland other trappings are gone. 
 
They hid alie, 
 
They were not perfect. 
 
But theydid have the essences that you remeber.. 
 
Again, I amimpressed with how you say so much in a short space. 
 
Cudos
 
 
 
Sally  12 20
 
  
 
SILENTNIGHT
 
 
 
 
 
Edges ofmemories
 
fromholidays past
 
Blur intoone another,
 
Softeningthe sharpness
 
Of Longingand grief.
 
 
 
Perfection,illusory in hindsight,
 
LikeChristmas card scenes,
 
Was neverthe reality.
 
 
 
Thetrappings of tinsel
 
Andsnow-covered fields
 
Masked thetrue messages
 
Of faithand family.
 
 
 
Much oldernow, I sit
 
Andgratefully remember,
 
A cup ofginger tea
 
And acontented cat’s purrs
 
As companyon this tranquil night.
 
 
 
                                                               By Sally Rosenthal
 
 
 
  

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