[Critique Group 1] Comments for Marilyn

[Mary-Jo Lord]

Lights Out, Love's In

 

 

I like this idea. Right away, Mamie, one of the dogs lists a number of pizza
shops. Telling the story from the POV of everyone in the house is clever.
More businesses are mentioned throughout the story. If you hadn't mentioned
the contest I wouldn't have guessed. This is a cute story and I think you
covered all of the businesses in town.

 

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