[Critique Group 2] Leonard's comments on Val's piece

[leonard tuchyner]

This poem is a eulogy  and dirge for Ann Frank.

A deep emotional work which

speaks of her innocence

and what she  endured at the hands of man at his worst.

It also speaks of Ann’s hope and

the hope of the author that

we can learn from such experiences and

somehow hold on to hope that it will be better in the future. So far,
don’t hold your breath.

Excellent piece.

Real economy of words.

You have packed a lot into a small space.



Valerie moreno

5:52 PM (1 hour ago)

I wonder about you
with sorrow and horror.
What happened to you
defies truth.

You were sweet innocence crushed
under the self corruption of madmen.
They took your family
from normal life
to resort finding hidden shelter
with no promise of survival.
You left behind
all your hopes,
wishes,
friends,
a beloved cat.
over the next two years,
war raged and evil burned away
rightt and human dignity
in ash and conscience.
You were betrayed,
taken to the bowel of hell
where you were destroyed,
only your father survived.
A devoted lady found
a diary in the shambles
of the secret annex,
Your diary, Anne
with all your rushing fear,
defiance,
expressive longing
teen questioning,
love.

You believed people
are good at heart,
young surity of sober wisdom.
Could you believe this
at the end?I try to hope
humanity can learn from
your short life and
honest words.
I pray we will
even when whispering lips
claim it is a hoax.
Valerie moreno



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Valerie moreno

5:52 PM (1 hour ago)

to jamesstarfire, jmyles63, me, sandrastreeter381, spiritlight982

I wonder about you
with sorrow and horror.
What happened to you
defies truth.

You were sweet innocence crushed
under the self corruption of madmen.
They took your family
from normal life
to resort finding hidden shelter
with no promise of survival.
You left behind
all your hopes,
wishes,
friends,
a beloved cat.
over the next two years,
war raged and evil burned away
rightt and human dignity
in ash and conscience.
You were betrayed,
taken to the bowel of hell
where you were destroyed,
only your father survived.
A devoted lady found
a diary in the shambles
of the secret annex,
Your diary, Anne
with all your rushing fear,
defiance,
expressive longing
teen questioning,
love.

You believed people
are good at heart,
young surity of sober wisdom.
Could you believe this
at the end?I try to hope
humanity can learn from
your short life and
honest words.
I pray we will
even when whispering lips
claim it is a hoax.
Valerie moreno