[Critique Group 2] Leonard's comments re: Sandra's piece

[leonard tuchyner]

The title was difficult to discern.

But I think it means you are agitated by the form forcing itself on a poem.

If so, I agree.

It is no more discernible to you than

Irregular verbs.

The rules on an acrostic poem

Force you to back awayFrom plasticity

You like things to follow old tried and true methods.

This probably is true for your life in general as well.

These rules require a learning  curve ,

Which you dislike ,

Especially if you didn’t choose these restrictive rules to begin with.

Yours is a straight forward approach

With progress not dictated by anything but product.

So the result is that these rules

Have  exactly the opposite results than  was the intention.

I totally agree.

These rules seem like they are forcing me into a world I choose not to
be a part of

I resent that.

Unles I choose it

Nice internal rhyme and good flow. Even if difficult to parce.



Like irregular verbs, whose rules elude my brain . . .

Electroplasticity, nonexistent at this time--



Cherished routine, upended—does anyone care? Notorious

Hater of learning curves, especially those I did not choose:

Anchor myself in faith, and tangibility of

Numbing motion and fixation: safety in parameters known.

Guileless with a pace too fast, and decreased sense of agency . . .

Excruciatingly aware of difference unacknowledged, save by me and
those who know my heart.

Marking off days of progress small and slow, my

Exhaustion reigns—subjugating citadels

Normally inhabited, when outside forces threatened.

Driven beyond baseline behaviors,

All reserve forthwith abandoned:

Giving no heed to would-be watchers,

I accept the breaking down, not yet noting reconstruction.

Tears flow, absent, intrusive gatekeepers:

Ambulating Halls of polished, dark-hued  wood, I

Train weary eyes on love’s advancing censer,

Inextinguishable . . . inviolable . . . my final answer.

Only this must be my guide:

Narrow and far, the  path toward rest and life.







Sandra



Not everything that is faced can be changed.  But nothing can be
changed until it is faced.

(James Baldwin)



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