[Critique Group 2] Snapshots from a Life Journey - version II.docx For 5-25-23 Group-2 session./BC

[jamesstarfire at gmail.com]

Snapshots from a Life Journey

C Brad Corallo

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an immense, featureless landscape

unrelieved by the fleeting green, 

 of an   imagined, restorative oasis.

Just a vast desert vista and 

 merciless heat that seems eternal.

League after league of baron sand.

Mirages shimmer in heat haze.

Visions to follow, or mere deceptions? 

 

All is reduced to survival.

The luxury of sorrow

stemming from feelings of

love too long withheld

doesn't matter.

You must still put all effort

into moving forward. 

 

As mouth dries,  

extreme thirst manifests. 

The vast, muffled silence is profound! 

 

This desert expanse

mirrors the desert within. 

How I long to find

that fabled oasis where

all is made well, once again. 

 

But as always, it continues to allude,

all my efforts and stratagems. 

 

I have pursued this quest for millennia 

and achieved little. 

Like grains of sand running through a funnel. 

The lead candle that burned so brightly,

now just remnant wax and fading flame. 

 

Is there anyone out there?

Is there anyone who can hear my entreaties?

IF so, please take my hand

and lead me through this unyielding wasteland. 

A questionable, rampant, rumor promises that on the other side

Something very like home beckons with open arms! 

 

Of course, hard won experience tells us that

odds are, it is actually something like:

low budget, senior citizen, Levitt, tract, prefabs

picturesquely nestled amidst 

the moist, yielding swamplands of South Georgia. 

With a prestigious sounding name

like: "Water Lane Estates -

a prototypical and 

totally unique moted community." 

 

jamesstarfire at gmail.com

 

 

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