[Critique Group 2] Leonard's comments on Brad'ssub

[Leonard Tuchyner]

Whatstrobe is flashinWhatcauses the pain in the skin.

I wouldhate to be you on a Sunday, 



ifthat  is what it is like. 



Maybe itis  only the first things you experienceand it will gbet better.



Is thiswhat a hangover is like?



Ofcourse, it is also funny. 



If youintend it so. 



It  certainly creates a mood.



Goodwriting.



Thestrobe flashes.



Glassdisc turns in the microwave.



The catvocalizes need.



Sun comesup slowly without passion.



More badworld news hovers in the air.



Irrevocably,the seconds tick away.



For thehundred and eleven thousandth time, I wonder if I’m mad?



 



Pain likesharp pebbles imbedded in skin.



Darkcoffee drips slowly into clear carafe.



A coldwind moans, rattling windows.



Puff ofscent from litter box, wants cleaning.



Eyes burnand head pounds.



A sneezebuilds, gathering momentum.



Wearinesshangs, suspended like a mobile.



It isSunday, but there is no rest!



 







 
 
Leonard I. Tuchyner, Author
 
https://www.dldbooks.com/tuchyner/
 
 

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