[Critique Group 2] Leonard's comments on Joan's sub

[leonard tuchyner]

Beautiful. Possitively beautiful.

It’s about a covenant. Not a written one, but one written in the wind.
One blade of grass. Between the fingers. Hold on to it, it holds your
entire future. Cherish it. Protect it. And, all that it promises will
be yours. But you’d better protect it forever. It is the beginning of
life and all life holds.



Joan’s sub for May 23



Dawning

by Joan Myles



one blade of grass is all she sees

slim and green between her fingers

secure in its place

green and growing

upward

sparkling with dew in dawn’s first rays

one finger of grass

and the song of morning opens

 the day full and rich and varied

spreads before her like Eden

as long as she holds it

sacred

one blade of grass