[Critique Group 2] Leonard's comments on Brad's sub

[Leonard Tuchyner]

Brads sub for December  22

 

This poem is  filled with mystery, 

hope,, fear and the question. 


 

Whathappened to the couple after Christmass. 

Didthey continue to be together in a different dimension. 

Didthey disappear  and go their own separateways? 

Ithas  an erieness that is unresolved.  

Thereis a desperation here, 

anda hope. 

Werethey only ghosts, or were they flesh and blood. 

Can you run away from one’s destiny?

Were their memories for real?

 

They met in

New York City on Christmas day. 

Their encounter seemingly by chance

though it didn’t feel that way. 

 

Hand in hand they visited

The tree in Rockefeller Center. 

 

They watched the skaters entwined 

in graceful ice dances. 

 

As they walked together

Snow began to fall gently.

 

They stopped at an anonymous bar

And savored Christmas ales. 

 

Finally she asked:

“Ah, this has been wonderful but whoare you?” 

 

“I am a man bearing 

a great burden throughout my life.

I too have not felt so alive formore years than I can remember. But I must ask you the same, who are you?” 

 

“I am a woman lost in sorrow 

with her heart broken too manytimes  

to ever mend again. 

But do you have any idea how it is

that we found ourselves togethertoday?” 

 

“Alas no. I don’t know.

But, does it matter?” 

 

“Yes, because I fear this just

might end with no explanation.” 

 

“If it goes that way,

Perhaps we will one day meet.

somehow, somewhere again!” 

 

“No she said, let us seize the day,out run

our respective fates 

and be together forever!” 

 

and so, hand in hand 

through city streets they ran!

 

But when The snow, now swirling

In spiral  patterns stopped. 

Nothing remained but the city

bathed brightly in a mist,

aglow with Christmas lights. 

 




 
 
Leonard I. Tuchyner, Author
 
https://www.dldbooks.com/tuchyner/

 
  
 
 

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