[Critique Group 2] Leonard's comments on Joan's subb

[Leonard Tuchyner]

Joan sub for Dec 22



 

Darkness can indeed slip through just about anything. 



It is especially true if it uses the pathway of the heart andbrain. 



Even if we tend toward the positive way of viewing things, 



almost all of us succumb to the dark nights of the soul. 



But that doesn’t stop us from feeling the Sun  shining and brightening our soul. 



The rhyming is exquisite.



 

Winter bird



by Joan Myles



 

darkness has a way of seeping



past layers of air and misty rain



into the place of spirit’s keeping



to numb the heart and dull the brain



 

and I succumbed to woe and weeping



despite my habit to refrain



from morbid tentacles of creeping



dread and urges to complain



 

but wait I hear amid the deepening



fog and drear of daily pain



your lilting song of hope reopening



a world of brightness once again



 



 
 
Leonard I. Tuchyner, Author
 
https://www.dldbooks.com/tuchyner/
 
  
 
 

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