[Critique Group 2] Leonard's comments on Alice's sub

[Leonard Tuchyner]

Alice sub for Oct 22

 

You’ve perceived the ghost in so  many ways. 

But it turned out to be you.  

I think this poem is written for the spooky effect, 

but I wonder if it has any basis in fact.  

You have used the unspoken   sense of a ghost, 

the smell of a ghost, 

the sound of a ghost, 

and finally sight. 

It’s true, ghosts can be perceived in  many ways. 

I  likethe various places and circumstances that you became aware of a ghost. 

Very  picturest.  

Each example has a spooky feel. 

Good job.

 

 

Once while on a chilly and bumpy hayride,

once while walking through the double-spancovered bridge,

once while exploring the abandoned farmhouse,

once while throwing corn at a passing car,

I felt the aura of an apparition.

 

Once while in the upstairs of my grandfather’sbakery,

once while in the writer’s garret of the oldpoet laureate,

once while in the secret passageway of The Houseof Seven Gables,

once while in the crawl space of our cabin upnorth,

I smelled a ghost.

 

Once while in the fiction stacks at the oldlibrary,

once while in the elevator to the 13th floor,

once while in the telephone booth at the trainstation,

once while in the voting booth in a city where Ilived long ago,

I heard a ghost.

 

Once atop the windy hill,

once inside the old gray hotel,

once at the top of the creaking stairway,

once at the end of the narrow hallway,

I placed the old-fashioned key into the keyhole.

 

With a tense turn of the key,

the door opened into a candlelit room

where there was no bed—

only an antique, freestanding mirror.

I looked into that full-length mirror

and saw

the ghost

was I.

 

 




 
 
Leonard I. Tuchyner, Author
 
https://www.dldbooks.com/tuchyner/

 
  
 
 

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