[Critique Group 2] Leonard's comments on Alice's sub

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What a creative idea – 



to send a prayer, a poem  a piece of yourheart 



on a snow flake. 



A beautiful thought.   



The snow flakes hold the opposite to what itseems to communicate at first.  



Your asking us to see the hidden essence  or possibility of the snow flake. 



As a poem its beautiful 



fristilin construction is the essence of a poem. 



In a piece of your heart 



the snow flake comes back to you  and frees your spirit.  



Your love makes you feel free. 



What could be truer?




 


 



In a Snowflake



 



poemby Alice Jane-Marie Massa 




 


In asnowflake,



I have sent you a prayer.



So, when next you feel a snowflake land uponyour face,



Cold and unsmiling from the frigid air,



Remember that that snowflake may just be the one



That has within its heavenly design



The prayer for you to shine



in Mother Nature’s sun.



 



In a snowflake,



I have sent you a poem.



So, when next you feel a snowflake land uponyour ungloved hand,



Stiff from the winter’s chill,



Remember that snowflake may just be the one



For you to catch and find within its crystalizedartistry



The warming, embracing little verse from me.



 



In a snowflake,



I have sent you a piece of my heart.



However, on this winter’s night,



The wind has blown it back to me.



I could feel sad, forlorn, or confused--



But what I feel, at last, is free--



Frozen to this spot in time--



But, Lord, dear Lord, your precious snowflake



Whispered, whispered “freedom”



to patient, solitary me.



 



Number of words:  171



Number of poetic lines: 35



 



January 18, 2022, Tuesday, for Group 2 CritiqueSession on January 27, 2022, Thursday



 



 



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