[Critique Group 2] Leonard's comments on Brad's piece

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Brad’s sub Jan 21




 


A passionate, lyrical  tribute to a singer.  



You make an entreaty for others  to embrace the realm which the singer singsabout. 



If only we could do that, things would be betterthan they are.  



He was, apparently, killed. 



You don’t say how he was killed. 



Was he murdered, or was it an act of God, asthey call it.  



Your reaction is profound.  



It is as if you are broken into your components 



which come together only in terms of 



the feelings, images  and the understandings  that his words and music create. 



You describe the effect beautifully. 



An upwelling of gratitude is felt for the gifthe has given.  



This poem is a tour-de-force of your writingtalents. 



It makes me want to hear his work.




 



A Messenger of the Light



C By Brad Corallo 



Word count 127




 


The warm gentle voice of the tragically killedsinger



rolls over me and I am undone!



I am overwhelmed amidst waves of tenderness andcompassion.



I stand as if turned to stone.



Lost in this reverie,



I am vastly scattered.



In time as if magnetically,



fragments that are me coalesce.



Only images from the



fairytale spell of his word paintings,



linger!




 


As I softly contemplate



The rare beauty of the gift



upwelling and releasing



  a liquid Sparkling cascade of soothinggratitude.



If only more of my kind



would share in, and



fervently embrace



this realm deep within,



things could be incalculably different. 




 


Inspired by the life and music of:



Jimmie Spheeris (November 5, 1949 to July 4,1984)




 


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