[Critique Group 2] Leonard's comments on Val's sub

[tuchyner5 at aol.com]

This is a brilliant description of a woman  



who in an effort to appear competent ande outgoing 



is actually a child inside 



who needs to find support 



by giving off a façade of confidence. 



But her propensity to act impulsively 



at the drop of an off-misgguided intuition 



to give advice 



causes her to step on other’s toes. 



Inwardly, she is shattered when proven wrong or halfwrong.  



Yet, she soldiers on 



without realizing her needs are getting in the way of herrelationships.




 


Val sub for April




Womanchild




 


Good title. She is both.




 



 


She is a woman--




 


outwardly confident, perfection is the light she follows,




 


even when soul and spirit become numb.




 


Under all circumstances, she seems to walk with confidence.




 



 


She is a child--




 


desperave for love and attention she forces,




 


never realizing she breaks trust boundaries.




 


Actually, she is desperate for love  and attention, 



and with that as her motivation 



she crosses boundaries.




 



 



 


Aggressive as a terbulant ocean,




 


self-centered as brilliance of sun,




 


Beautiful descriptions. 



I suspect she is vibrant, 



but violates those boundaries without intension.




 


she stays locked in misintuition and pulsing calamity




 


This stance in life keeps her in a situation of calamity.




 



 



 


I watch her stride with bare need glaring--



she knows what others ought to do,



always right, short of center.




 


She is quick to give advice, 



which intrudes on others boundaries. 



Seeming to come from a place of all knowing, 



she is quite the contrary.




 



 


How will the collapse of half-truths



leave her when it comes,



shaking good intentions and mind-blossoms crushed




 


What will happen when she is proven wrong and herassumptions 



which seemed brilliant at first  



are proven to be based on half truths?.



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