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[James]

Critiques for 9-26-19 Group 2 Session 

1. Joan's Piece:

This is a fascinating piece and my favorite Joan poem so far. I have reread
it about 6 times. First, I love parentheses as anyone who knows my writing
will agree. A simple yet brilliant image "life is a sea carrying me between
two shores." Birth and death? Ah, but perhaps even more. A continuing line
with special points along it. Or an infinite circle a place of silent
knowing? Or perhaps even this: "we are the ever-shifting sea foam 
Floating in the vast, blue eternity of God." 
I hope so! It sounds very peaceful. It is both metaphysical and spiritual.
There is a lot here and all is sensible, no worries. 
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2. Val's Piece: 

Another Val piece of few words creating a vivid space of being. It recalled
to me immediately the Dylan line: "a saxophone somewhere far off played"
from A simple Twist of Fate. There are those magical moments when a distant
melody can stop us dead in our tracks and while it is happening we know that
it is a transcendent moment. Then the player finishes and things return to
the everyday humdrum. But some of us save up such moments like treasures.
Here we have one captured in words. To all, never stop listening the song of
forever is out there, for those with ears to here.  
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3. Leonard's Piece:

A piece, very different than my own, that asks "where do poems come from?"
The poet invokes his Muse and gets advice in multiple images where to listen
for inspiration. His list is more fun than mine. It is hard to miss with a
poem like this if one like Leonard has the skill to craft the images of
where to listen. And of course, after listening to all she suggested, then
listen more which is probably exactly what a Muse would counsel.  
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4. Alice's Piece: 

An intricate piece that is not immediately accessible. It seems to be making
reference to a long past, very negative event involving harsh and one gets
the impression, undeserved destructive criticism in reference to a piece of
writing? At the beginning, we have a poem apparently addressing the
disappointed poet, I think. By the end the "aspiring poem" seems to have
become a poet in her own right. Another important theme is the one
supportive friend when the devastating message was sent to (her) the initial
addressee. Some pretty images and clever word play "share a dessert of
poetic retort."  Alice does this very well. 
 
  
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