[Critique Group 2] Emailing: 3-21-19 Group 2 critique session

[James]

Hey There Group 2,

Due to an unexpected circumstance I will be unable to participate in
tonight's call. However I enclose my critiques   pasted below and as an
email attachment. Also, congratulations to Leonard on his excellent poem
being published for a second time in a different venue. "Way to go bro!"

Best, Brad

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3/21/19 Group 2 critique session

1. Joan's piece:

And, what might that word be? Alone, introspective, reflective piece on a
winter evening. Truly seeking the "silence at the heart of things" where
there aren't any secrets at all. 
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2. Val's piece:

For me this was an incredibly moving piece. It is wonderful to have a Val
piece when life "pressed lightly" on her senses and there was "bright
unspoiled joy." I have also felt that. You also in a very few words evoked
the "beach thing." One of my favorite Val pieces.  
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3. Leonard's piece:  

Not an easy piece upon first reading. I have no problem recognizing that
there is a dialogue taking place as you indicated in your subsequent email.
"Sailing is a nuanced thing." Is it being "taken" or is it "a going" or
both. It is like an internal dialogue where both voices are splitting hairs
and not managing to sail anywhere. I have experienced this state of mind
though I confess that I am not totally sure why you have chosen to
accurately capture it in words. It is not a comfortable mental space to
occupy for very long. Even the title sets the stage for ambivalence of which
this may be a study. A very minor point of interest is that I have actually
been to Matheson Hammock.
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4. Alice's piece: 

First I think the poem works equally well with or without the last stanza.
The last stanza is just an amplification of the preceding one. Angels are
very popular today both within and without the "New Age" culture. Personally
alas, I have never met one. I read somewhere that 90% of Americans believe
in angels. If this statistic is true, it is truly amazing. "Almost true"
saves the poem from being overly sentimental in my humble opinion.
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