[Critique Group 2] Leonard's comments re: Alice piece for June

[tuchyner5 at aol.com]

A lovely warm memoir and tribute to Aunt Zita. 



I’ve made comments about the repetition ofthe ‘table’ word.  But then I realizedyou were doing that on purpose, and I changed my mind about needing to findalternative words.  



The words table and table-cloth have amusical sound when repeated, 



and the repetition intensifies the imagesand sensations . 



Besides, there are places where you chooseto use the word cloth by itself.  



I love the warmth and images of thepictures painted in this piece. 




 


poemby Alice Jane-Marie Massa



AuntZita's Checkered Tablecloths



 



 



Mynorth-facing kitchen



catcheslittle sunshine,



butcatches many 



once-upon-a-timemy memories.



Consider leaving out, my.’  



Atopthe maple table--table in Indiana—



Only one table.



is agreen-and-white checkered parents' tablecloth



thathad lain on one of the smaller tables



There is a pleathora  of tables. See if you can find synonyms  for table. You might say cloth in stead of table cloth.   I’m not sure you can find a good substitute.



atmy Aunt Zita's Italian restaurant.



Numerousplatters of spaghetti and meat balls



oncedecorated this tablecloth.



Aromaof my aunt's sauce and Italian veal



stillarise from this tablecloth.



Happyconversations echo over



andaround this keepsake cloth at every meal.



Starched,ironed, and blessed many times



byAunt Zita's hard-working hands,



thisgreen-and-white checkered tablecloth



liessoftly and casually in my kitchen.



 



Bornin 1908, Aunt Zita--



modern,ahead of her times--



wouldsmile at seeing atop her cloth



aDownton Abbey teapot



on adinner plate from my mother's china set



anda silver-blue vase filled with pink silk tulips--



becausemy aunt had a splendid garden of tulips.



 



As Idrink my herbal tea



atthis table of memories,



I amnourished by the love and strength



ofmy beloved aunt and other ancestors.



 



FromAunt Zita, I have one other tablecloth--



thered-and-white checkered one,



whichis always on my table



forthe Fourth of July and Festa Italiana.



Oh,what a time to celebrate



foodand family!




 

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