[Critique Group 2] Leonard's comments on Alice's sub for April

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The words are carefully chosen  in terms of their sound compatibilities. 



There are no sound awkardnesses.




 


 



Inlibrary galleries, 



wordportraits--



framedin leather,



hardback,or paper--



areon geometric metal and wooden shelves,



noton graceful easels.



 



Wordportraits



arelacquered onto pages,



boundtogether tightly:



witha multiple fan feature,



Creative description of how a book is heldtogether.



movementglides from left to write,



then,a turn from right to left.



I  Love the way these 2 lines have raised the actof reading to a dance.



Ah-ha!The Literary Butterfly 



This is an invention.  



I see the butterfly  wings as the movement of hands. 



On another level, the reader is samplingeach book or flower in turn, 



not settling long in one place. 



Forever sampling.



floatsunder a right-hand page



andlifts the page to the left.  



You might consider, “And lifts the pageWestward.” 



Within a confined space, West is always tothe left. 



The sounds work a little better that wayand 



you get around the problem of 2 ‘these so close together. 



Twonew word portraits appear.



 



Inthis fictional or nonfictional fashion,



I think fiction and non fiction here refers to genre.



Icontinue through the word portraits



I think word portraits refer  towhole  books here, but you might meanpages, chapters or other lesser units.



ofeach chaptered room of this gallery.




 


Although poetic license  can accept a multiple meaning of chapter heewithout hurting the quality of the poem, 



it is inprecise  in lieu of potential units that chapter can refer to.



 



Withbutterfly grace,



readingpowerfully uplifts



I like the connection of butterfly withuplifting.



themost artful,



imaginative,enriching



flightof the mind.



I love the line, “flight of the mind.” . 



You’ve blended the concepts of butterfly,flight, mind, and grace masterfully.  



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