[Critique Group 2] Emailing: Critiques for Group 2-4-25-19

[Joan Myles]

Thanks for anenergizing, instructive session! Here are my thoughts:
Alice-
Love the images. The poem came alive for me in a most surprising an
dmagical way with the "Aha" following the literary butterfly through
its flight.
*I challenge you, dear Alice, to shake free for another rendition of
this piece  written  in a fanciful form.
-Brad:
You grabbed me from the start, kept me dazzled with your lively
carnival in the face language. Only the "passive" language of "you are
drawn", you are seduced", "the sun has fallen" caught me off-guard.
-Leonard:
Love this poem, your best yet in my book! The unity of all creation in
the renewal-death-transformation cycle...lovely, just what I needed!
-Val:
So moving and passionate...a great vocalization of social justice
cries from our own age and every other.

Thanks again, all!
Joan


On 4/25/19, James <jamesstarfire at gmail.com> wrote:
>
> Critiques for Group 2-4-25-19
>
> 1. Val's piece:
>
> In 21st century America, there are seemingly multiple groups of "throw away
> people." It is certainly a crime to be poor in the US. We have failed
> miserably in demonstrating valuing our older citizens. Racism and
> homophobia
> are still very much alive. Not to mention the disdain which so many have
> toward immigrants.  In this society, we are quick to judge. Some people
> seem
> to be sure that white Anglo-Saxon protestant males are the only true
> Americans. A thoughtful and thought provoking piece.
> ***
>
> 2. Joan's piece:
>
> A reflective and personal piece which addresses the loss of loved ones. I
> have lost many and it is never easy. Nor is it the same. Each loss is
> different. It is one of those things that only time can mute; though never
> fully. Not sure I get the part about the "southern woman." This piece is
> quite effective in expressing sorrow.
>
> ***
> 3. Leonard's piece:
>
> At first the title sounded a bit strange. But "leaves' whispers" really
> fits
> the things that long past leaves might whisper as they participate annually
> in the death and rebirth cycle of our planet. As always, Leonard has
> sculpted some superb imagery. An appealing tribute to the Earth's
> wondrously
> different seasonal identities.
> ***
>
> 4. Alice's piece:
>
> A truly wonderful tribute to writing and reading. Writers create word
> portraits which enrich the lives of others who read them. The piece also
> highlights the importance and uniqueness of books. May they never be
> replaced! I like this one a lot!
>