[Critique Group 2] submission for November 29 critique session: poem and explanation

[Alice Massa]

EXTRA PRELIMINARY NOTE FOR GROUP TWO:At the November 4 critique session 
of BOE, the following acrostic trilogy received from the larger group 
only a critique from Leonard and a little from a second person.Since I 
know Leonard had a couple of questions about this piece and since none 
of the rest of you offered a critique of this three-part poem of only 27 
lines and 61 words, I am submitting the piece for our critique session 
of November 29.

If you want some hints concerning one interpretation of each of the 
three acrostics, refer to the note after the trilogy (after the second 
set of four asterisks of my placement).If you wish, you may ask me a 
question via e-mail to facilitate your preparing a critique.Having 
written this offer, I do understand that if a poem or a joke has to be 
explained, the poem or joke is not really well done.Nevertheless, the 
following lines are meaningful to me:I have even used the first acrostic 
as a prayer.In general, I suggest that you do not try to focus too 
heavily on the word "humanity" in initial readings.Additionally, I 
recommend that in early readings of the very short piece, you do not try 
to find the connection among the three parts.These two points may come 
later.

After the first set of four asterisks is what I sent to the WPL for the 
critique session of BOE on November 4.

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NOTE:The following poem consists of three acrostics, each of which 
spells out "Humanity."The initial letter of each of the 24 poetic lines 
is bolded.After the title of the piece, each acrostic (or part) has a 
subtitle.

*Trilogy:An Acrostic Trinity of Humanity*

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by Alice Jane-Marie Massa

*Part 1.The Clockwork of Humanity*

*H*old on, hold on--

*u*ntil

*m*ajestic

*a*ngels

*n*estle

*i*nto

*t*eardrops and

*y*awns.

*Part 2.Acrostic Crossroads of Humanity*

*H*ow can we

*u*nderstand

*m*icrobursts

*a*gainst

*n*egativity

*i*f

*t*enderness

*y*ields to other choices?

*Part 3.Untangling Humanity*

*H*ope

*u*ntangles

*m*iracles--

*a*ddresses

*n*ightfall,

*i*cicles,

*t*orn pages from

*y*earbooks.

number of words: 61

number of lines:27

ajm321kh at wi.rr.com

copyright 2018, ajm (October 30, 2018, Tuesday)

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POST-SCRIPT:If you want some hints of explanation about the above 
acrostics, please read on.If you prefer no explanation or hint, stop 
reading this section.

Part 1.This acrostic prayer is a plea to someone who is losing 
significant physical, emotional, and/or spiritual strength to hang on to 
life until "his time" or "her time" comes as predestined.How do the 
angels come for a lost soul?The angels do finally come with the sadness 
of teardrops and into the tiredness of yawns.

Part 2.If we are too soft--too tender--how can we comprehend people who 
are trying to show us how to avoid negativity, negative people?At the 
"crossroads" of negative and positive attitudes, we cannot bolster 
humanity if we ignore the negativity and take another easier, yet less 
admirable path.

Part 3.Hope allows miracles; hope helps us to deal with the hard times 
of life."Yearbook" can refer to a high school yearbook or the yearbook 
of each year of a person's life.

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Talk with you all on next Thursday evening, the 29th!

Hoping that all of you enjoyed a very happy Thanksgiving,

Alice and Willow

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