[Critique Group 2] Emailing: The Isle Of Avalon--For our 8-23-18 critique session.

[James]

	On the eve of this long planned and prepared for medical procedure,
I decided to submit the attached-also below for our 8-23-18 session. Alice
had suggested that I submit a piece posted to the list at the end of July
and such was my plan. But somehow 2 more pieces came along on 8-5 & 8-6 and
I decided to send this one. I am never sure how seriously to view such
sojourns into rhyme. As you will see, the rhyme scheme is AA/BB. I fear
Leonard will find the language tedious as in my previously submitted rhyming
pieces. All I can say is, other than my cat howling in the background while
I struggled and sought for suitable rhymes, I had a lot of fun putting this
together. So, here it is-for better or for worse!
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The Isle Of Avalon
C By Brad Corallo
Word count 237

In the Isle of Avalon they sing
songs Of The Once and Future King.
He slumbers there on soft green grass
and time it barely seems to pass.

By subtle spell I did there wake
called by The Lady Of The Lake .
As my heart was empty and hope was gone
she drew me hence to Avalon.  

Its fields and vineyards knew my tread
and in meadows green I made my bed.
The enchantress taught me many things
of lore and spells and bygone kings.

I learned to play the lute and lyre
and the secret magic's of bale fire.
I gained great wisdom, renown and fame
and all who dwelt there knew my name.  

I studied herbs and the healing arts
and never failed with crossbow darts.
I became adept with sword and lance 
and my standing there did fast advance.

I had the gift of vision dreams
and could weave the light of bright Moon beams.
I was known as bard and sage by all
and one day received The Lady's call.

"For Arthur's Merlin you shall be
and with him return across the sea.
To unite the peoples once again
in a kingdom that will never end."

So through labors Camelot was wrought
though its establishment was dearly bought.
And today naught but a legend told
and a hope in memory for men to hold.


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