[Critique Group 2] Critiques 4-10-2018

[Abbie Taylor]

Brad, in this sentence, "The gentleman, Bernie thought and said “bout a 
yearin ahalf.” there should be a comma after "Bernie" and after "said."

Val, in the second line, try "takes" instead of "taking."

An apostrophe should not follow the word "its," and there are a couple 
places here where you have an apostrrophe after that word.

In the first line of the next stanza, the word "dim" should not have a B 
at the end.

The title doesn't fit because it's not clear in the poem what the 
ultimate decision is. Otherwise, this is interesting.

⠠⠁⠇⠊⠉⠑⠂ I love this poem's whimsical quality and can't think of anthing 
that should be changed.

Leonard, I love the way this poem portrays gardening as a labor of love, 
and again, I can't think of anything that should be changed. This would 
be perfect for The Weekly Avocet's garden challenge. Good luck.

-- 
Abbie Johnson Taylor, Author http://abbiescorner.wordpress.com 
http://www.abbiejohnsontaylor.com abbietaylor945 at gmail.com Order my new 
memoir at http://www.abbiejohnsontaylor.com/memoir.htm
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