[Critique Group 2] My Submission for May 23rd Session

[Abbie Taylor]

Pasted and attached is a poem I wrote several weeks ago at a workshop. 
The prompt was to write about a place that evoked memories.

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THE WOODEN FRONT PORCH


With cobblestone steps and walkway,
bare of furnishings, this is where
I stood with a wood chip for a microphone
while younger brother Andy accompanied me
on an old paint can,

also where rehearsals were conducted
for a puppet show Mother directed
in which I played Winnie the Poo.

From here, Andy aimed his urine stream,
leaving Mother to wonder
how the grass got so yellow,

then collected morning newspapers
to be folded and delivered.
When Andy overslept, Dad found the papers.
His cry of “Ah Hell! Andy!”
roused the entire household.

Andy spent many happy hours with friends
playing miniature basketball
with a small hoop above the front door.
I hated the thuds and clatters
that resounded through the house.

One hot summer day,
we tried selling comic books,
but no one was interested,
especially since the girl across the street
was selling lemonade.

For years, we traversed the porch
while coming and going
to and from school, the park, downtown

until the house was eventually sold.
Now, a new family graces the porch
with a couple of rocking chairs,
will make their own memories here.

-- 
Abbie Johnson Taylor, Author http://abbiescorner.wordpress.com
http://www.abbiejohnsontaylor.com
abbie at mysero.net
Order my new memoir at http://www.abbiejohnsontaylor.com/memoir.htm
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