[Critique Group 2] my sonnet for March 21 critique

[Alice Massa]

Dear Group Two writers,

For our March critique session, I challenged myself to write a sonnet 
because I had not written one since, I believe, 1989.Although my iambic 
pentameter may not be perfect, I did hold to the ten syllables per line, 
fourteen lines in the form of a Shakespearean sonnet:three quatrains and 
a couplet, with the rhyme scheme abab, cdcd, efef, gg.The "volta" comes 
at the end of the third quatrain.The poem does praise something beloved, 
as a decent sonnet should.

I wrote the first draft on Friday and Saturday.After revising it, I let 
it sit for a day.Now, after shoveling way too many snowflakes, I think I 
am ready to send to you the following version.

Honestly, I fear this is not one of my better poems; but writing the 
sonnet was a good exercise which makes me appreciate more fully the 
freedom and poetic possibilities of free verse.

Looking forward to talking with you all on March 21!

Happy Pi Day!

Alice

ajm321kh at wi.rr.com

March 13, 2017, Eve of Pi Day

*A Sonneteer's Bucket List*

by Alice Jane-Marie Massa

Alas! The day has come for me to ask:

What can you find in my pale Bucket List?

Do I present for you too hard a task?

Of course, my list has a poetic twist!

Turn to Bedloe's Island for your first clue.

A pedestal was placed and did inspire

A "Colossus," once thought of as so "new"--

verses of which immigrants will not tire.

Oh, you know, Ms. Lazarus holds the lead:

her poem is immortalized on a plaque

for generations of tourists to read.

No pages are needed--take this book back!

I want my poem in granite.Please don't laugh!

My Bucket List comes with my epitaph.

--end of sonnet



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