[Critique Group 2] My Critiques for Tonight's Pieces

[Abbie Taylor]

Val, I like the way you use the acrostic form to depict your feelings, 
but I would like to have known more about the calamity itself. Perhaps 
a non-traditional form of poetry would better tell your story.

Brad, I like your use of language, but this is too abstract. After 
reading it three times, I still have a hard time getting any meaning out of it.

Leonard, I feel you have a right to express your views, and I have no 
problem with you posting the poem on the Writers’ Partyline. Although I 
don’t know of any markets that would publish something like this, I’m 
sure they’re out there. Check Poets and Writers and other resources. Good luck.

Alice, I think the parts of your poem that are in parenthesis are a 
distraction, and the poem would read better without them. However, if 
you feel they’re necessary, then I suggest finding a way to include 
them in the poem without distracting the reader from the story.

Otherwise, I love the way you tell this story in just one sentence. 
That must have been a challenge. I’m also taking the Hadley Elements of 
Poetry class so appreciate the preview of coming attractions.

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