[Critique Group 2] My Notes for Leonard's Piece

[Abbie Taylor]

Leonard, in the following passage, a couple of changes should be made.

“I show the way on old worn knees
and my third leg, crook’d wood cane,”

Substitute “with” for “on” and “wooden” for “wood.”

“I show the way with old worn knees
and my third leg, crook’d wooden cane,”

Otherwise, this is good. I like the memories you evoke here.

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