[Critique Group 1] Leonard's comments on Cleora's sub

[Leonard Tuchyner]

On first reading this I made one assumption lackingcertain information. 

Than I happened to be talking to Cleora 

and discovered the ants and their legs were the title, 

if there was to be a title. 

The knowledge  madeall the difference. 

Now I understand that the ants have come in to live in atree  near her house 

and thus form a satellite to it with their subpopulation.  

Somehow, I got the idea that it  was in a tree rather than her house.

I think it is a good poem, 

but needs the title. 

 

The scores in this case might be the feet of your birds

.  That may meanthat tells you that you are home.  

But I’m not sure what you mean by satellite home. 

In fact, I’m not sure of anything in this piece. 

I can’t wait for the explanation.

 

Cleora sub for Feb 23

 

of tiny feet

 

scores of tiny feet

a satellite home in mind

chose my house as home

 

 




 
 
Leonard I. Tuchyner, Author
 
https://www.dldbooks.com/tuchyner/

 
  
 
 

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