[Critique Group 1] DeAnna's critiques 3-29-23

[Deanna Noriega]

3292023 Critique session

 

Sally

WINTER'S FINALE

As always,

Poignant, capturing a time and place with rich detail that makes us shiver
and drink the scent of flowers. A beautiful rendering of a complex yet
simple scene.

 

Leonard

Walking With Nature  

Catches the brutality of winter and the balance of mioving through the
bitter cold and keeping moving in it.

Excellent work.

Cleora

The Caregiver

by Sly Duck

Feels paranoid. Your anger seems to focus on her ineptitude and comes across
as hostile. Needs to be tightened up. It is too long and belabors the
feeling of helplessness.  Technology seems as much a part of the process as
does her mistakes.

 

 

Marcia

Wake Up!

Marcia J. Wick

432wordsWell crafted and reasoned. I can't find anything that needs
revisions.

Warm Regards,

DQN

 

 

DeAnna Quietwater Noriega

Cell: 573-544-3511

Email:  <mailto:dqnoriega at gmail.com> dqnoriega at gmail.com

Author of Fifty Years of Walking with Friends

https://www.dldbooks.com/dqnoriega/

 

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